episode 82315
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episode 82315
This has been a very enjoyable read. Just thought I'd give JH, Xavier, and KR an approving nod.
Pretty cool thread! Intriguing!
Pretty cool thread! Intriguing!
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Made some edits to my episode.
I'm renowned for doing that. Nothing major. Just some minor grammatical glitches and whatnot. Just thought I'd put it out there.
And yes I do realize that in episode 9446 Adele claims that, "The Dragon extracted the information he needed to construct the trap from my mind! If I had given it to him willingly, do you think that he would have imprisoned me in it?"
In that same episode, it's revealed that the 'purple energy trap' affects ones memories.
And in my own episode Belboz claims that HE is the one who 'negotiated' with Minestus on that matter.
Cheerio.
I'm renowned for doing that. Nothing major. Just some minor grammatical glitches and whatnot. Just thought I'd put it out there.
And yes I do realize that in episode 9446 Adele claims that, "The Dragon extracted the information he needed to construct the trap from my mind! If I had given it to him willingly, do you think that he would have imprisoned me in it?"
In that same episode, it's revealed that the 'purple energy trap' affects ones memories.
And in my own episode Belboz claims that HE is the one who 'negotiated' with Minestus on that matter.
Cheerio.
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Yes, that would make sense. I figure that the journey from Caemlyn to the caves would be a longish one, so that Fred would have needed a horse. He would therefore need someone to look after that horse for the possibly lengthy period that he was in the caves. And then that someone would need a horse of their own.
Of course, even on horseback Fred would be unlikely to outrun a dragon on the wing, but even at the best of times logical thinking isn't always his strong point.
"Sigin rose to his full height..."
Given that he's stuck in tiger form, how about "Sigin rose onto his hindlegs..."?
Of course, even on horseback Fred would be unlikely to outrun a dragon on the wing, but even at the best of times logical thinking isn't always his strong point.
"Sigin rose to his full height..."
Given that he's stuck in tiger form, how about "Sigin rose onto his hindlegs..."?

JH
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Yes, I figured there may be some confusion on that.
I actually didn't mean for it to be interpreted as him rearing up on his hind legs. Just straightening up. Cats are usually completely horizontal from tail to nose. However, they do posses the ability to 'straighten up' as it were. You know, raise the neck up. Like if they smelt something interesting...
Or are provoked...
Or whatever...
Anyway, I changed it.
I actually didn't mean for it to be interpreted as him rearing up on his hind legs. Just straightening up. Cats are usually completely horizontal from tail to nose. However, they do posses the ability to 'straighten up' as it were. You know, raise the neck up. Like if they smelt something interesting...
Or are provoked...
Or whatever...
Anyway, I changed it.

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...And I did. Hopefully it's not too weird and incomprehensible. I really am trying to keep things a bit simpler this time around... Well, until I finally write that next Borderlands episode, anyhow. 
It's really weird to contrast the stuff I write now with the stuff I wrote when I was 15. It all seems so overearnest and goofy now. There's a lot more emphasis on Fred's awkwardness with women than I would have now. Gee, I wonder where that came from. Still, at least there are some interesting ideas in there, which is more than you can say for some of the things people write as teenagers.

It's really weird to contrast the stuff I write now with the stuff I wrote when I was 15. It all seems so overearnest and goofy now. There's a lot more emphasis on Fred's awkwardness with women than I would have now. Gee, I wonder where that came from. Still, at least there are some interesting ideas in there, which is more than you can say for some of the things people write as teenagers.
There's a lot more emphasis on Fred's awkwardness with women than I would have now. Gee, I wonder where that came from.

To be fair, I think that other people were already writing Fred like that. It seems in character for him, and gives the opportunity for some gentle humour st his expense.
I haven't yet read your new episodes, but am lookinbg forward to doing so. BTW, are you aware of Sir Toby's poll concerning the possible appearance of advertising on the site?
JH
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Oh come off it, KR.
Goofy and over earnest?
You're being a bit harsh on yourself.
And who the hell HASN'T been a little awkward around a beautiful woman.
Quit being stupid, KR. Your work has always been great.
You...dumby
But I get what you're saying. Good god man, you should have seen the absolute CRAP I was writing at 15.
But we ARE our own harshest critics. Welcome back.
Goofy and over earnest?
You're being a bit harsh on yourself.
And who the hell HASN'T been a little awkward around a beautiful woman.
Quit being stupid, KR. Your work has always been great.
You...dumby

But I get what you're saying. Good god man, you should have seen the absolute CRAP I was writing at 15.
But we ARE our own harshest critics. Welcome back.