I just want a minor edit here so the gag I was trying to do makes more sense (Astra says something, but is interrupted by Fred who interprets it as something else.)
Please change the line:
"Actually I'm a warri-" The maiden began, only to have Fred interrupt.
To:
"Actually I'm a war-" The maiden began, only to have Fred interrupt.
and also:
"I suppose it is my duty to protect you. Alright, you can come!" Fred smiled and nodded.
To:
"You're a whore? Anyway, it is my duty as a knight to protect innocent civilians. Alright, you can come!" Fred smiled and nodded.
Thanks JH/Toby.
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Please, by all means, extend any of my episodes. It's good to know someone out there is actually reading the crap I'm writing.
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